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I started writing a song that I think is headed in a decent direction, but either something's missing or there's too much of something. Help me figure out how to make it awesome. Here's what I have so far.....
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I look in the mirror and all I see
Are your cynical eyes staring back at me
Piercing my soul with that stare
Fair is foul and foul is fair
Your luminous heart and flourescent love
Like the falling snow with tainted blood
Razor-blade requiems and twilight dreams
Mean nothing over your neon screams
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I think it kinda sucks, but I might be able to salvage it. But I might need some help, so go ahead and comment on it. If you know how to improve it I'd really like to know. Or if you think it totally sucks and I should just give up writing I'd like to know that too. Oh, and today I had some pretty kick-a** burgers. And steak too. There was some bratwurst and some other stuff, but the burgers were like a pound each, so I didn't really want to eat anything after that. lol. I slept through the majority of the Super Bowl. I'm not a big [American] football fan, but I thought the Patriots had it. I saw a few of the commercials and they were pretty good. And I think I should probably get some sleep since it is like 4:30 now. Rock On

-Gil