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Journey's to Owidaho!
my thoughts in all of they're unbound chaotic beauty.
I had a brilliant idea! Why not have a monthly story? I could add onto it in short chapters weaving a long story that doesnt really have to end ^^ This is gonna be great! Though I'll have to get some support for it before I start on the second chapter this is the first one add comments if you think I should continue and if you dont want me to then... sssshhhhh! Oh and the title? it's...

Synonymous Saints

Chapter 1: before you hit the ground all you hear... is the wind...

Clouds flying by... My eyes are closed but I can feel the sun warmly brushing my face but then cooling under the welcome shelter of passing shadows... I dont want to open my eyes I feel so good! oh what nirvanna I settle in? Why dont I open my eyes and see? No no I'm content here comfortable in what I think is grass. Theres no hurry... I'm not wanted anywhere... nor by anyone...
Like a distant yell I hear someone... they say once, "Keo!"
I rustle slightly to this call but it just echoes away slowly and so does my care but again louder like the voice was closer now, "Keo!"
Who is that? That name sounds familiar... Is it my name? But it was followed by another long silence... Right as my care waned again the voice repeated again closer but joined by another, "Keo! Keo!"
Who is that? What is my name? Whaat is that name? "Keo!"
I want to open my eyes now but I cant! I want to move but I cant! "Keo! Keo!"
I open my mouth to speak but air just passes by my lips... "Keo! Keo! Keo"
Another voice joins them but I cant do anything... "Keo Keo! Keo?"
who is that? "Keo!" Why do they yell it over and over? "Keo!"
I cant feel anything and I cant think straight... "Keo!"
I try as hard as possible to remember something... anything about myself but nothing... "Keo?"
more voices join they're all so familiar but who are they? "Keo!"
everythings so familiar but myself... "Keo" I cant remember anything... "Keo Ke..." whats going on? where am I? "Keo!"
I feel a sharp pain in my face and I'm flung back towards what I thought was ground but is air... "Keo!" I'm sent back into another world falling helplessly through the air and I hit the ground. It's cold and hard full of dirt and rocks but they just cover a harder surface... "Keo?" concrete? My senses slowly return And I open my eyes. the light hurts and my visions foggy like I just woke up... But everythings grey until a few silhouettes move in front of me. I can move again I move my hand onto the ground trying to push myself up but it trembles and slips. Immediatley one of the shadows came over me and stuck something out at me. My vision cleared further and I could see it was a hand. I reached for it and grabbed it as hard as I could. The world faded in faster now and as I regained my footing I could see it was a girl helping me up her hair was brown but tucked under a dark grey helmet. Her name came up in my head and it slipped out of my lips quietly sounding like a question, "Sheana?..."
She put her hand on my shoulder as I started to wobble and looked at me worriedly. She looked over her shoulder at a man in a similar outfit as her his long blonde hair hanging out of helmet and said to him, "Damnit Jack! did you have to hit him so hard?"
He put his hands over his head and leaned against a brick wall behind him looking unfazed, "Hey it snapped him out of it..."
"shut up you!" She threatened him with her fist but another man stepped in his clothes the same grey and a helmet awkwardly rested on his head almost touching the glasses on his face. He had short black hair that barely peaked out from under his helmet. He spread his arms out one towards Jack and the other in Sheana's direction. He said in a meek voice, "G-guys stop it we're due towards Arch-Angel Companies position and if we're late they'll be left guidless."
I could'nt remember exactly what he ment but I wanted to keep the peace, "H-he's right we shouldnt fight each other..."
Sheana turned to me and pointed a finger at me grabbing my shoulder to pull me closer instead of hold me up. She almost yelled in my face, "What in the hell was that about? Spacing out and daydreaming?"
Confused myself I asked, "What did happen I-I cant remember a thing..."
She let go of me and looked at me quizzically, "You really dont know?"
I shook my head slowly a little worried. She continued a little less angry, "You just stood there with a glazed look in you're eyes... We tried calling you're name but you didnt answer..."
"So where are..." before I continued an explosion brought down a wall near us. Rubble flew from it and a rock hit me in the head. I fell to the ground dazed and all around me were yells, "Armor!" "get down!" "get to cover! get to cover!" "Keo? wheres Keo?"
And all at once my memory came back where I was, who I was, and it dawned upon me heavily like a wieght onto my back...
I was fighting a war...


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  • User Comments: [11]
    Wow...I mean..I'm speechless ^^ 3nodding That was awsome ^^

    comment Kakuno Ai · Community Member · Tue Jan 31, 2006 @ 07:51pm
    i really do like but i cant stop getting the feeling that i reminds me of a life....a life that everyone once lived or is living however i do like it........well i hope you do do stuff like this...i like it...

    comment Miumie · Community Member · Wed Feb 01, 2006 @ 09:03pm
    ohhh I love it!! Very creative and detailed! A war huh? It sounds like its gonna be an interesting story. Cant wait to read the next chapter!

    comment Shadowcalibur21 · Community Member · Wed Feb 01, 2006 @ 10:29pm
    Awesome Stuff Gen! I think this is a good start to your stories...I am looking forward to reading more...keep it up! 3nodding heart

    comment Dark_Soul_Angel · Community Member · Thu Feb 09, 2006 @ 05:05am
    NUUUU its a cliff hanger! I must know what happens! -Grabs you by the sholders and shakes you.- WHAT HAPPENDS!!! gonk 4laugh heart

    comment Jestrana · Community Member · Sat Feb 11, 2006 @ 04:47am
    wow great first chapter! cant wait till number 2! ^ ^

    comment D3mosth3n3s · Community Member · Mon Feb 13, 2006 @ 03:51pm
    WOW^^ awesomeness^^ love the new idea, keep up at it! heart
    -Jesse-

    comment ~^Amane_Shimedzu^~ · Community Member · Mon Feb 20, 2006 @ 10:09am
    Creative I love it heart


    comment Swift Cat · Community Member · Mon Mar 13, 2006 @ 05:50pm
    Wow thats really good! ur really good at writting! keep it up, its really good story! i cant wait to read the next chapter! whee

    comment Leiux · Community Member · Mon Mar 13, 2006 @ 10:22pm
    damn, dude! that's some good s**t right there!

    comment Dark Lady Trinity · Community Member · Wed Mar 22, 2006 @ 05:54pm
    Interesting. I like the approach. However... Oh, you know me. I'm going to critique the hell out of it. It's in my nature.

    Many of the sentences are run-ons and the tense changes a few times throughout the chapter. A couple times I think you made a question out of a statement, unintentionally. Watch out for that. The presentation is a bit sloppy as well. Perhaps you would think of double spacing between the paragraphs if you don't want to indent them. And I'm going to stop before this turns into an essay.

    [/grammar bashing]

    I really do like it. I'm going to read chapter two, now. biggrin


    comment petite succubus · Community Member · Mon Jun 12, 2006 @ 03:34am
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