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...umm
Why you never believe me
I do not know.
Why you never believe me
Do you think i'm putting on a show?
Why you never believe me
I think you don't understand.
Why you never believe me
on this loud and unpeaceful land.


this one is a little different hope you like it i have never really written
a poem with this kinda rhyme scheme






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sarithorg
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commentCommented on: Mon Apr 07, 2008 @ 12:54am
that was really good. ^_^


commentCommented on: Sun May 18, 2008 @ 10:07pm
nice havent seen your journal in a while keep at it theyre all great pirate



up ur butt
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PunkRockVampyre
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commentCommented on: Wed Aug 06, 2008 @ 09:56pm
good i like this one alot good rhyme scheme
and it is quite true i love it


commentCommented on: Wed Aug 06, 2008 @ 11:38pm
i love the rhyme scheme here. the only thing i can say is work on the grammer "why DON'T you EVER believe me?"
and change the fourth line, it just doesnt work at all.



unforgivenlove
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