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The Dark Bullet = Short-story
The wind blew silently as a bullet pierced the cool, peaceful, night air. Soon it was a war of bullets, one after another. The calm, cool, grass soon became a crimson stained pool. As the rain of bullets ended the battlefield was covered for miles with the mark of war. Hundreds of bodies lay silently as thick, black clouds began to roll over them covering the star filled, navy sky. Rain fell as thick as fog while lightning and thunder roared over their new territory. The fire's of the storm's fury engulfed the bodies which spread as fast as the next flash of lightning that struck feeding the hellish flames. The storms rage finally ended when the radiant beams of morning breached the clouds. The fires anger died down with a warm, and calming breeze as it swept over the blood stained field of war. The end of suffering was completed with a new radiant beginning of morning glories.

{This was probably one of my best short-stories I've ever written, but it could probably improve. I did write this back in 9th grade.}






User Comments: [2]
ShiranuiAmaterasu77
Community Member





Sat Aug 18, 2007 @ 02:44am


Well, I've decided to leave the first comment. I personally like it, but not everyone likes those kinds of stories. I'm sure it could use improvement as well. Anyways, I would like to know what others think about it without rude comments, just ways you'd think it could be better. 3nodding


mobrose
Community Member





Thu Nov 22, 2007 @ 08:03pm


rofl i loved it!!!!!ur right a thing or 2 could change, but it was amazing!


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