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Such a long ways walk
For just a young woman's heart.
To just be denied by truth
I'm just an uncanny sleuth.
My heart has been broken
By soundly words that were spoken.
"I'm sorry that you're not the one.
But please every things been done."
I starred at the ground,
With such a sorrow filled frown.
When I felt the fingers
That would forever linger.
A warmth filled kiss
Is what I felt amiss
As I watched her walk away
With her hands intertwined together
With the man that had made her answer sway
- by redheadsrule13 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/30/2010 |
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- Title: Uncanny Love
- Artist: redheadsrule13
- Description: A guy falls in love with his friend who's a girl, but she already has a boyfriend/ fiance' i guess. just something that popped into my head.
- Date: 10/30/2010
- Tags: uncanny love
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Comments (1 Comments)
- ChelseasDeadSmile - 09/26/2018
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Admittedly, I, at first, read this as the girl being walked away from instead of a guy until you explicitly mentioned "her" at the ending phrase which led to me being confused. You should revise this and make it more clear that it's about the girl walking away and not the guy.
3/5 Needs some revising, but not completely hopeless. - Report As Spam