Saturday Mournings

• Artist: Celsaeus
• Description: I wrote this one for a poetry portfolio, yea everybody hates them, but they count 25% of your grade, so, yea....anyway, I thought this one was pretty good. Everybody in my class loved it, so I thought i'd see what the gaians think. If your familiar with Emily Dickinson, We had to write a poem in her style. Oh and before people get onto me for it, yes i meant to spell the title like that. Well, I hope you liked it.
• Date: 10/14/2008
• Tags: saturday mournings sadness emily dickinson

The Silence in this Empty room-
Is Deaf'ning to my ear-
I call out for the Comfort lost
My Voice is all I hear-

Your Presence lingers in the Air-
You're nowhere to be found-
I search the House for one Last chance
But you, I Never find

I Long to be with You again-
Your Death still Haunts me so-
Now all that's left to Comfort me
My Screaming- My Echo.

Comments

[Kcera]

To quote you "nice..." xd I said I would critique, but I'm not so good with poems. It's pretty good. Is the second stanza not supposed to rhyme? Good job.

[Flash2011]

Not a whole lot of people study the Dickinson style of poetry and for that I will have to give you a 5/5.

[Celsaeus]

which i could say I do, but, idk i'll try and think of some. I mean people think this is hard but once you get the rhythem, it's not that hard.

[Kira_Urufu]

lovely poem....it was the best one i have read today.....do you have others you could share????

[bluecuttie3]

I realy love the style. And the poem, it's amazing good work!!

[mexicantacos2003]

very "emily dickinson" style it is.
very 80's (1880's that is).
i like your poem.
(but its a little emo).

but still it must have been hard to write something like this.

like they say

"The artist is nothing without the gift, BUT
the gift is nothing without the WORK."