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That smile
The one you always wear
That mysterious smile
It hides everything
Your pain
Your sorrow
Your true self
Once
Just for once
I want to see it fade
To see your emotions
To see you angry
To see you shattered
So that I
May help you through it
Instead of going on with this little charade
The one you call
Happiness
Jordan Nneka Benjamin
Comments (6 Comments)
- infinite_personalities101 - 09/09/2008
- Great poem! As soon as I first read it I could see how deep and meaningful this poem is! 5/5!
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- My Name is - O - R - I - - 09/08/2008
- At first, this poem is okay. Then you re-read it, and it's a lot deeper and meaningful. I love it!
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- Darkeydance - 09/08/2008
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A great poem actually. I think it has alot deeper sense than you thought about when you wrote it though xD
It tells something about the human, that they smile to hide everything, and then carry it around inside, even hiding it to those who want to help and be with you through hard times.
If i should be a critic, i would say you need structure. The lines seem quite random. But then again, you got the stuff! You just need a bit of structure ^^ - Report As Spam
- Mr-Mario-JOCK - 09/08/2008
- wonderful u have heart an i amire u for that.
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- Calmena - 09/08/2008
- It's good. ^^
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- kikyo1547 - 09/08/2008
- this is a good poem i no ppl like that
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