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Above the clouds and under the basking sun, there was a temple hidden by lightning and rain, blizzards and snow. Inside a man is sleeping in a tomb which inscribed his future and past of when he will awaken and who will he meet by fate. Little did he knew was that a human being was to translate the strange carvings on the worn walls of the inner and outer temple.
Eyes fluttered open from a pale god of pure ebony hair and faded crimson eyes. His lips moved and his hands grasped the air inside the coffin. He stood up and brushed off the cobwebs and years old dust from his skin, then glancing at the wall. How long has he been sleeping? What is his fate after he has awoken. These questions need to be answered and quickly but how? He then saw his marble-stone body and it was covered with black sash and gold shoes. There was two doors, one to the godly world and another to the green planet, earth. But alas, the door to the gods had been locked and he has been banished from the world.
Minro, the forgotten god has awoken at last. He walked to the door to the heavens and shamefully doubted himself as he slowly yet gracefully walked to the door to the dirt and water, the green grass and the smell of oxygen. He flew down from the temple and landed in front of a large oak tree. He was in the middle of a borderline where as he must cross the tree and lose his godly powers and finish his awaiting fate in the earth world. Minro turned back and a golden gate was locked for sure. He can live on that line for his life or go to earth and seal his fate and finally return to heaven. Minro then showed no emotion and boldy crossed the border line, his feet padding against the grass and soon a stone pathway. His clothing has changed and he was surprised at what he heard rather than what he wore.
He couldn't hear the silent whispers of the trees, and cannot hear the talking animals and the sigh of the angels. All he heard was dogs barking in the distance, people rushing to get to work and the cries of sirens from ambulances and police cars. It wasn't what he hoped the world the Lord created to be, it was more like the world Minro could've created if he wasn't put to sleep. Minro then stared down to his clothing, a red sweater with a white shirt and black skinny jeans with a pair of skulled converses. He looked at his skin color, it was still pale white, still like a marble statue. The modern god looked up from where he was standing and saw a house, with a rose garden in the front and a sleeping cat in the window sill. Glancing at the windows, he saw a girl looking out, watching him and quickly looked away and lowering the blinds. Minro didn't smile nor frown as he new he must be going to somewhere. He tried walking but stopped as he saw a building only 3 blocks away, a school perhaps? Maybe if he can just go to check and see if anyone is there at the moment.
It was still morning and a cool summer breeze overcame his body. It was nice and cool, like invisible water washing his face and body. Then he tuned as he heard footsteps behind him and he turned around. A blushing girl about his same height was following him, and she looked quite tasty at the matter. Minro smiled for the first time and said,"Why miss, if you are looking forwards to talking to me so much, let me introduce myself, I am Minro and who are you?" His voice was like a violin, an instrument that never needs tuning. The girl replied with a blushing face but looking at him straight-forwardly,"My name is Narot, and I'm not following you, I go to school on this path," she said.
to be continued...
- by Crackhead Pikachu |
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- | Submitted on 11/26/2009 |
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- Title: The Deadly Heavens
- Artist: Crackhead Pikachu
- Description: The long slumber of Minro, the forgotten god has awoken. He has been entwinded with the prophecy of a girl named Narot. Narot must quickly translate the prophecy hidden in the temple wall where Minro has opened his eyes after his father, God created the world and he created the dark ages shortly after. But Narot doesn't know that her heart is included in the prophecy as well.
- Date: 11/26/2009
- Tags: deadly heaven
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Comments (2 Comments)
- DreamWarden - 03/12/2010
- P.S. If the temple is above the clouds it can't be hid by the elements which happen under the clouds. I'm not going to hold that against you, but some people are picky so you might want to change that a bit.
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- DreamWarden - 03/12/2010
- Your style is interesting, and while this is creates a very poetic way of storytelling it also makes is somewhat hard to understand. I overall like this story, I'm curious to know where it's going to lead, but the plot is a little hazy, which for a start, is alright so long as you clarify soon. But imagery, dialog, even character depth all seem very good, so with just a little editing this could become a very good story. I hope this suggestion helps.
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