- Jerrelle's just a normal 14 year old boy that live's in a boarding school by himself in a world that is on the brink of destruction. He goes to a boarding school in England but barely ever shows up to class. The thing is that Jerrelle has a special gift that no one knows about except his pet monkey Zero.He has a crush on a foreign exchange student named Yukino. "Sigh, I hate this boarding school so much." said Jerrelle. He walked into his dorm room and Zero jumped into his arms. Jerrelle grabbed his backpack and helped Zero inside. The bell for lunch rang and Jerrelle decided to get a bite to eat before he left the country. Jerrelle walked down the stairs when he saw Yukino walking towards him. " Hi Yukino." said Jerrelle. " Oh hi Jerrelle." said Yukino. Jerrelle turned red and put his hands in his pockets. " Here Jerrelle, I wanted to give you this during class but you never showed up." said Yukino. Jerrelle took the note from Yukino and started to read it. "I know your secret!!!!" read Jerrelle. He looked up at Yukino and started to back up slowly. "You've been hiding a monkey in your room." whispered Yukino. Jerrelle blew a sigh of relief and pulled Zero out of his backpack. "Can I hold him for a second ?" asked Yukino. Jerrelle let Yukino hold Zero for a couple of seconds and she started to smile softly."Here you go, he's so adorable." said Yukino. Jerrelle smiled at her and put Zero in his backpack. "Can he stay the night in my room for the night ?" asked Yukino. Jerrelle thought it over and decided that Zero could stay the night with Yukino. Jerrelle looked at his watch and ran outside without saying goodbye to Yukino. Jerrelle jumped down the stairs and teleported to Tokyo.
- Title: SYNDICATE season one
- Artist: vaati14
- Description: Chapter 1: Jerrelle
- Date: 03/17/2009
- Tags: syndicate season1
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Comments (3 Comments)
- sugasu - 02/21/2010
- I agree with iRetaliate. Plus, the beggining doesn't make much sense. He's an ordinary 14 year old boy, but he has special powers? And a pet monkey? Tell me, are those normal. Work on it. And don't forget to indent and start a new paragraph with dialogue. Just practice and you'll get better.
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- iRetaliate - 03/20/2009
- pretty badly written, constantly redundant, 1/5
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- vaati14 - 03/18/2009
- this is pretty much a story that i have been writing for a long time
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