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Im running. not for the freedom. but something else. wind blows into my face. a moist humid breeze. it smells like its going to rain. as I run, I feel the wanting to run faster. then. that's wen I remember what I'm running for. I see their heads bobbing up and down as they walk away from me. although I was close enough to reach for them, I couldn't even hear them. I could only hear the beating of pulse.
I try reaching my fingers out to touch her. the only friend I thought I had. but as soon as I was close enough to hold her hand, it suddenly disappears. I try asking what was happening. but they ignore me as if they don't even know I'm there. i repeated what Ive wanted to say all my life. I got louder and louder. I started screaming it. they probably couldn't hear me. I couldn't hear anything else anymore. I was still screaming but I couldn't even hear myself.
they start to walk faster. or was it just that I got slower. I stopped, giving up everything. my eyes got blurry at the vision of my beautiful friends. no. they weren't friends. they were more like family. but not anymore. I can't believe they would just walk out on me. I feel the hard floor on my knees as the hard drops of water pour onto my back. I stare at them walk away hoping for them to glance back. no one did. hoping wouldn't do anything.
then. I felt a sharp pain in my chest. I fell onto the floor clutching the pain. it was hurting so much. I want it to stop. I just layed there as my cold empty body got dirty. nothing else happened. no one came to help. I was helpless. hopeless.
vulnerable.
- by DuskSummer |
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- | Submitted on 07/31/2008 |
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- Title: Vulnerable
- Artist: DuskSummer
- Description: this is a story i've thought of. i sometimes imagine things like these but a little diferent. i hope you'll like it. please comment and rate!! thx.
- Date: 07/31/2008
- Tags: vulnerable helpless ignored dieing
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Comments (7 Comments)
- K4ND4 - 02/28/2009
- Wow this blowed me away,I thought my story was good...This was the best Ive ever red in my life!
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- KK_empty_tears - 08/04/2008
- intense. I agree with Diadra though. ^.^ good work
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- iCuramba - 08/04/2008
- dengh, my brother!! that is amazingzingzing. im such an awesome writer. biggrin lawl. jk jk.
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- Consumed by Love - 07/31/2008
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Good, good, but sadness overwhelms me...D:
At least I had fun reading this dramatically. [: - Report As Spam
- shed tears_ of blood - 07/31/2008
- hmm..pretty good. i like it. 8D i give it a 9! :]]
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- red roses and blue blood - 07/31/2008
- That was great! Its just so sad... But thats why I like it. smile Oh and thx for the comment. Hopefully you make more stories. luv ya tu.
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- Diadra - 07/31/2008
- Not bad. I'd work on capitalization and some of it could flow better but not bad.
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