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Finishing off the world one thought at a time...

I plan to put my DDR records and basicly my thoughts in this thing...

alterlight
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Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2005 @ 07:59pm

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	just a crapy poem... In the shadows of the buring bright night, I'm dead to the world out of sight, out of mind, out of sprit, out of time, blazing through the night never thinking, never woundering, never yourning, just quiet emotions while the wheel keeps turning. Rate this from 1/10 please thank you.

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Commented on: Wed Jul 06, 2005 @ 08:32pm


	ill give that a 10/10 i love poems like that heart

Commented on: Wed Jul 06, 2005 @ 10:30pm


	Hmmm...food for thought one might say. I've never been one for poetry so please don't take this entirely to heart, I'm going to give a 7/10. C'mon, kid, you know I'm a fiction gal. heart

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Commented on: Thu Jul 07, 2005 @ 12:02am


	6/10 Alot of my friends and me wrote poems...Sorry but If it was like Deeper id Like it...

Commented on: Thu Jul 07, 2005 @ 02:29am


	sounds kinda depressing but, i like it 3nodding 10/10 ninja

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Commented on: Thu Jul 07, 2005 @ 03:21am


	10/10 Like I said earlier, I really like it. Maybe I should elaborate a bit more: I like the imagery your poem presents. It sounds pensive and at the same time seems new and fresh. And plus rhyming poems make me happy. Free verse is fun but it takes talent to make a poem rhyme and have it follow a general idea. =3 It makes me...think.

Commented on: Thu Jul 07, 2005 @ 04:03am


	it's a tad gothy, but I do find it quite likable, It got nice imagery, and the ryming is a plus. 8/10. ^.^

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Commented on: Thu Jul 07, 2005 @ 04:58am


	9/10 pretty good, you're on your way!

Commented on: Thu Jul 07, 2005 @ 09:03pm


	I loved it, you're a lot better at poems than me 10/10

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Commented on: Fri Jul 08, 2005 @ 06:02am


	This poem is a perfect 10!!! i love it! it keeps me a clear picture in my mind and really uses my senses!!

Commented on: Fri Jul 08, 2005 @ 09:21pm


	Wow, I would love to read you non-crappy poems! 8.5/10

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Commented on: Sun Jul 10, 2005 @ 05:06am


	9/10 i like it alot, im jealous because i cant write poetry

Commented on: Sun Jul 10, 2005 @ 06:32am


	Very emo. 6/10, only because I've read better and the spelling was distracting... neutral (At least I'm being honest.)

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Commented on: Sun Jul 10, 2005 @ 03:34pm


	In the shadows of the buring bright night, thats a line from another poem tiger tiger burning bright in the forest of the night its extreamly similar not to be mean just a warning 2/10 cry sorry

Commented on: Fri Jul 15, 2005 @ 06:31pm


	I give you 1/10 just because i hate you ^_^

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Commented on: Sat Jul 16, 2005 @ 08:06pm


	that was awsome. i give that a 10/10. you should read mine it's called Alone and Forgotten.

Commented on: Sun Jul 17, 2005 @ 12:41am


	7 i think its a good start blaugh

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Commented on: Sun Jul 17, 2005 @ 12:54am


	10/10 and i love ur siggy i'm irish too!

Commented on: Sun Jul 17, 2005 @ 12:55am


	Wow. that poem was interesting 4laugh it was kool, but do you seriously feel that way? if so Cheer-up lol it kept my interst was well put and actually ment something i give your poem an eight out of ten 4laugh

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Commented on: Wed Jul 20, 2005 @ 04:25am


	like two thumbs....(u) (u) <- they don't look like thumbs but its the best thing I could do..lol 10/10

Commented on: Sun Aug 07, 2005 @ 07:18am


	I love it. (: Good job. 8/10 Heres one of mine. It was to my friend Kyle. confused look up as a tear rolls slowly down my cheek I think about better days and wonder if I'll feel that way again you look at me with those eyes I know so well always serious, so deep and insightful as though you're always in control But not today not now Now you look so scared like for once you don't have the answer I gaze at you looking deep into those hazel eyes Hoping to understand why you've said those things you did I wonder for a moment if this is all a dream if I shall wake in the morning and be relieved you look at me with a confusion I have never seen slowly pull me towards you and wipe the tears from my cheek