Blood Rain

[Kirinkinetic Telepathetic]

Blood spouts down,
like pouring rain,
you look at me on the ground,
with hate and disdain,

crimson streaks my face,
I'll kill you now,
never leave this place,
I don't know how,

warm and slick,
like heart's desire,
makes me sick,
my body's on fire,

metallic and salty,
a sickly scent,
imperfect and faulty,
it reaches it's vent.  

[Chortleasd]

WOot!!First comment two in a row!! I'm on fire!! I like how you expressed it and used plenty of adjectives,I can see it!! xD......wait...eww...

 

[kristine54]

really emotional and tragic... sad really good... biggrin