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 Posted: Sat Mar 03, 2007 11:23 pm
I wrote a sonnet in the Shakespearean format but... um its upside down
i hope you like it. I need criticism.
FOREST
You are the forest, with its many trees
You are the light and dark that plays in leaves
You are the wolf whose howl keeps men away
You are the owl, hunter kill all that's small
False mien, you pretend to be kind by day
While cruel traps you have set for them to fall
At night you fright, forbidding to many
Threatening treachery on entering
Sans me, in you i find sanctuary
Search paths, my thoughts are on you centering
Moonlit path i follow where I'm not lead
I am seeing things in much varied light
Darker paths uninvited i do tread
I tend to search out what's not in my sight.
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Posted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 8:40 am
i like this, yes it may indeed be upside down, but its ok at the same time, because with that it lends to your individuality, which is always a good thing smile
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Posted: Sat Mar 10, 2007 10:32 am
I'm not the best person to talk to about sonnets (I hate them with a passion), but for my least favorite type of poetry this wasn't bad at all.
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Posted: Sun Mar 18, 2007 3:31 am
I believe you did a wonderful job writting this poem. smile This is definately meaningful and individualized. Great job!!!!
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Posted: Fri Mar 30, 2007 1:48 pm
yay it seems so far my poem has been liked. Thanks.
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