Hello. I'm Evandre. I'm new here. Wanted to post a poem, and see what you all think. Please, don't just rate, actually give me criticism. I find it helpful. This one isn't very good, so I'm looking to improve it.
Regrets, Wrapped In Blue Lines
Are those the words I said to you that night?
I was too drunk on emotions to remember it -
At all.
In the prayers I sing to my stars, I said
If I'd been wiser, maybe I would've made a better choice.
You so sweetly sang your soliloquoys,
But those lies are over and done.
How can we be so happy the gods are smiling,
When the peasants are praying on the doorstep?
Reality: Resurrection!
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