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 Posted: Sat Feb 10, 2007 10:19 am
The heartbeat within,
the truth,
the thing you hide from those around you,
your soul
Too afraid to let it show
to have it crushed
like so many times before
your sprit
You keep it hidden
hoping it won't be broken
wanting to protect it
your heart
Tears fall
as you run away from it all
the troubles, the problems
your life
But let me protect you
let me shield you from
rapid fire above
your protector
I'll be there
right beside you
I'll never leave
cause I'm your friend
I'll catch you
When you fall
I'll find you
when you lose your way
While I'm here
don't be afriad
because you know
I'll save ya
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Posted: Thu Feb 15, 2007 4:31 am
It's pretty good.. i like it but feel that you might need to put a little more emotional expression into it.. maybe thats just my bias because im so emotive.
Thanks for sharing though
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Posted: Wed Mar 14, 2007 12:44 am
Not bad...
Please use a little of rhymes... There are some parts not good hearing
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