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 Posted: Tue Feb 06, 2007 2:11 pm
I'll Post the First one ... and if you don't know any poem .. just rating is also fine
Rules:
Rate and don't insult , effort is valuable
Do not use TXT TLK in your poem , it is a disgrace
And most of all Enjoy the show wink
Is it me
Tell me am I wrong .. am I not what I'm meant to be
Is it me in the mirror or someone else that I see
Am I nice or am I evil .. or something in between
Am I good looking or the worst you've ever seen
Is the truth that what's wrong
and why would it take so long
to find myself in me
Or just something that I could be
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 5:36 pm
10/10 Your Poem...
Here is One Of Mine...
"Only Death & You (Armaggedon)"Imagine every city light turning off Watch as every sky night fades out Feel as every night light explodes off Listen to the people shout Laberynths of pain... Torture us Seas of blood... Drown me Tornado... A red bus Seth... A red tree of a broken leaf Imagine the city burning Watch the sky turn red Feel my heat running Listen to my heart turn dead Wake up... This is my dream A dream from which only death or you came to awake me This is my Armaggedon Only death or you... (c) Carlos J. Cintrón [Arionex]
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 8:08 pm
Arionex
10/10 Your Poem...
Here is One Of Mine...
"Only Death & You (Armaggedon)"Imagine every city light turning off Watch as every sky night fades out Feel as every night light explodes off Listen to the people shout Laberynths of pain... Torture us Seas of blood... Drown me Tornado... A red bus Seth... A red tree of a broken leaf Imagine the city burning Watch the sky turn red Feel my heat running Listen to my heart turn dead Wake up... This is my dream A dream from which only death or you came to awake me This is my Armaggedon Only death or you... (c) Carlos J. Cintrón [Arionex] I thought that it was good, but I really didn't get the second stanza. Specifically, the second half of the second stanza. Other than that, it was pretty good. I'm not saying mine will be any better. Daddy's little Girl Daddy's Little Girl was so confused Why Mommy was all scarred and bruised. Late at night, she would sometimes cry Rythmically, softly, like a sad lullaby. Mommy, don't cry. Little Girl needs you To be strong, steady, and carry her through. Mommy, don't fall. Stand up firm and strong. Take Little Girl. Teach her right from wrong. Daddy's Little Girl was so confused When Mommy stood against the abuse. Shouting, violence, and physical force All came down to a messy divorce. Daddy, don't cry. Surely you knew better. Your family is tainted, corroded, and weathered. You beg and plead. You swear you'll change, But your thunder is muffled by all of your rain. Years go by. Mommy's doing alright. Got a new husband that Daddy doesn't like. He called Little Girl. Told her not to replace His "father" position with a new face. Daddy, don't try. Don't guide her with your hand. How can you be her father if you can't be a man? A father protects and doesn't leave his child alone. He is there for them and makes a house a home. Little Girl, don't cry. You are little no longer. Your memories have made you stronger. Take your new daddy. Trust him with your heart. He'll heal the family that was once torn apart. Daddy's Little Girl has a family that's complete. She found a new life that's happy and sweet. She no longer sobs with her body all curled. She was never really "Daddy's Little Girl."
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Posted: Thu Feb 08, 2007 9:43 am
Kassassin Arionex
10/10 Your Poem...
Here is One Of Mine...
"Only Death & You (Armaggedon)"Imagine every city light turning off Watch as every sky night fades out Feel as every night light explodes off Listen to the people shout Laberynths of pain... Torture us Seas of blood... Drown me Tornado... A red bus Seth... A red tree of a broken leaf Imagine the city burning Watch the sky turn red Feel my heat running Listen to my heart turn dead Wake up... This is my dream A dream from which only death or you came to awake me This is my Armaggedon Only death or you... (c) Carlos J. Cintrón [Arionex] I thought that it was good, but I really didn't get the second stanza. Specifically, the second half of the second stanza. Other than that, it was pretty good. I'm not saying mine will be any better. Daddy's little Girl Daddy's Little Girl was so confused Why Mommy was all scarred and bruised. Late at night, she would sometimes cry Rythmically, softly, like a sad lullaby. Mommy, don't cry. Little Girl needs you To be strong, steady, and carry her through. Mommy, don't fall. Stand up firm and strong. Take Little Girl. Teach her right from wrong. Daddy's Little Girl was so confused When Mommy stood against the abuse. Shouting, violence, and physical force All came down to a messy divorce. Daddy, don't cry. Surely you knew better. Your family is tainted, corroded, and weathered. You beg and plead. You swear you'll change, But your thunder is muffled by all of your rain. Years go by. Mommy's doing alright. Got a new husband that Daddy doesn't like. He called Little Girl. Told her not to replace His "father" position with a new face. Daddy, don't try. Don't guide her with your hand. How can you be her father if you can't be a man? A father protects and doesn't leave his child alone. He is there for them and makes a house a home. Little Girl, don't cry. You are little no longer. Your memories have made you stronger. Take your new daddy. Trust him with your heart. He'll heal the family that was once torn apart. Daddy's Little Girl has a family that's complete. She found a new life that's happy and sweet. She no longer sobs with her body all curled. She was never really "Daddy's Little Girl." Although I don't have a new poem... yet. I want to rate this poem with a 10/10
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Posted: Thu Feb 08, 2007 3:42 pm
Kassassin Arionex
10/10 Your Poem...
Here is One Of Mine...
"Only Death & You (Armaggedon)"Imagine every city light turning off Watch as every sky night fades out Feel as every night light explodes off Listen to the people shout Laberynths of pain... Torture us Seas of blood... Drown me Tornado... A red bus Seth... A red tree of a broken leaf Imagine the city burning Watch the sky turn red Feel my heat running Listen to my heart turn dead Wake up... This is my dream A dream from which only death or you came to awake me This is my Armaggedon Only death or you... (c) Carlos J. Cintrón [Arionex] I thought that it was good, but I really didn't get the second stanza. Specifically, the second half of the second stanza. Other than that, it was pretty good. I'm not saying mine will be any better. Daddy's little Girl Daddy's Little Girl was so confused Why Mommy was all scarred and bruised. Late at night, she would sometimes cry Rythmically, softly, like a sad lullaby. Mommy, don't cry. Little Girl needs you To be strong, steady, and carry her through. Mommy, don't fall. Stand up firm and strong. Take Little Girl. Teach her right from wrong. Daddy's Little Girl was so confused When Mommy stood against the abuse. Shouting, violence, and physical force All came down to a messy divorce. Daddy, don't cry. Surely you knew better. Your family is tainted, corroded, and weathered. You beg and plead. You swear you'll change, But your thunder is muffled by all of your rain. Years go by. Mommy's doing alright. Got a new husband that Daddy doesn't like. He called Little Girl. Told her not to replace His "father" position with a new face. Daddy, don't try. Don't guide her with your hand. How can you be her father if you can't be a man? A father protects and doesn't leave his child alone. He is there for them and makes a house a home. Little Girl, don't cry. You are little no longer. Your memories have made you stronger. Take your new daddy. Trust him with your heart. He'll heal the family that was once torn apart. Daddy's Little Girl has a family that's complete. She found a new life that's happy and sweet. She no longer sobs with her body all curled. She was never really "Daddy's Little Girl."
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Posted: Fri Feb 09, 2007 12:39 pm
Kassassin Arionex
10/10 Your Poem...
Here is One Of Mine...
"Only Death & You (Armaggedon)"Imagine every city light turning off Watch as every sky night fades out Feel as every night light explodes off Listen to the people shout Laberynths of pain... Torture us Seas of blood... Drown me Tornado... A red bus Seth... A red tree of a broken leaf Imagine the city burning Watch the sky turn red Feel my heat running Listen to my heart turn dead Wake up... This is my dream A dream from which only death or you came to awake me This is my Armaggedon Only death or you... (c) Carlos J. Cintrón [Arionex] I thought that it was good, but I really didn't get the second stanza. Specifically, the second half of the second stanza. Other than that, it was pretty good. I'm not saying mine will be any better. Daddy's little Girl Daddy's Little Girl was so confused Why Mommy was all scarred and bruised. Late at night, she would sometimes cry Rythmically, softly, like a sad lullaby. Mommy, don't cry. Little Girl needs you To be strong, steady, and carry her through. Mommy, don't fall. Stand up firm and strong. Take Little Girl. Teach her right from wrong. Daddy's Little Girl was so confused When Mommy stood against the abuse. Shouting, violence, and physical force All came down to a messy divorce. Daddy, don't cry. Surely you knew better. Your family is tainted, corroded, and weathered. You beg and plead. You swear you'll change, But your thunder is muffled by all of your rain. Years go by. Mommy's doing alright. Got a new husband that Daddy doesn't like. He called Little Girl. Told her not to replace His "father" position with a new face. Daddy, don't try. Don't guide her with your hand. How can you be her father if you can't be a man? A father protects and doesn't leave his child alone. He is there for them and makes a house a home. Little Girl, don't cry. You are little no longer. Your memories have made you stronger. Take your new daddy. Trust him with your heart. He'll heal the family that was once torn apart. Daddy's Little Girl has a family that's complete. She found a new life that's happy and sweet. She no longer sobs with her body all curled. She was never really "Daddy's Little Girl." Here's one of mine My Unbeating Heart There are days when I want to cry, And others to be eternally numb. Days I wish would end with blood and tears, And times when I want to sleep forever. There are moments when my chest aches, And times when I feel no pain. Months seem to pass right by me; And I can not say or do a thing. Hours seem an eternity to me. Minutes stretch for days. My tears no longer flow now. Blood runs not through these veins. For only mere seconds do I ever feel alive. Then no pain is felt as my soul dies. A shell; a lowly unwanted shell. That is all I shalt remain. My heart is black, my blood cold. I have lost all train of thought. My soul is dieing, slowly yet surely. One day I shall be gone. Blood has run free from my many wounds. It stains my skin and heart. My eyes are growing darker. My soul has fallen apart. The darkness is my sanctuary. The light no longer lives. I only feel hell’s flames. Now, let me tell you this: I was once alive, Happy with who I was. I had a dream, I had a life. But then it was all gone. Many ask why I’m corrupt. I tell them just to think. They do not understand. I just sigh and sulk away. But, for your time and patience, For you have heard my unbeating heart; I shall give you the answer. Then we shall forever part. I was made corrupt by those who never think. They just play with matches and slowly burn. People have made me this way, unfeeling and so low. So watch your heart and your back, Or it will be your turn!
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Posted: Fri Feb 09, 2007 10:34 pm
OMG!
To Each And Every One Of Them Poems... 10/10
*Soon I'll post more*
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Posted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 1:27 pm
Arionex OMG!
To Each And Every One Of Them Poems... 10/10*Soon I'll post more* Thanks for your Reaction It means A lot .. To all of us .. I guess ^_^ When you "Post more" Please show us your creativity
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Posted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 7:42 pm
Fall
Stop
Take a moment
Put the peaces
Back together
They all fit
You know this
Take your time
Don’t rush
It will come
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Posted: Tue Feb 13, 2007 9:00 pm
litra FallStop Take a moment Put the peaces Back together They all fit You know this Take your time Don’t rush It will come Wow. A short, sweet poem about perserverance. I like it. I like it a lot. Good job! smile Yesterday Yesterday was beautiful, but yesterday is gone. Perhaps tomorrow, we will be where we belong. Days will come and days will go. We'll look back and smile. Just hold on to what you have. It only lasts a while. What we once held has long faded away. We're left with only memories of what used to be today. Now it is yesterday. Slipped backwards in time. We continue forward, but I'm sure we'll be just fine. I long to walk in yesterday, but it is in the past. As I was in my yesterday, today arrived too fast. Today is going to leave, then tomorrow will appear. I'll greet tomorrow as it comes. What is there to fear?
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Posted: Wed Feb 14, 2007 12:03 pm
Poem rating 10/10
Here's one of mine again
Title: Death of a evil Hero
For he who has no fear
the end is coming near
staring into the light
putting up his las fight
wrestling with this end
but no way he can defend
against the powers of fire
no soul can withstand his desire
For he wants you in hell
Smiling and wishing you well
cause at this point of no return
One thing sure .. Burn baby Burn
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Posted: Wed Feb 21, 2007 5:10 pm
Moviefreak2007 Poem rating 10/10 Here's one of mine again Title: Death of a evil Hero For he who has no fear the end is coming near staring into the light putting up his las fight wrestling with this end but no way he can defend against the powers of fire no soul can withstand his desire For he wants you in hell Smiling and wishing you well cause at this point of no return One thing sure .. Burn baby Burn wow awsome poem i totally love it heart okay heres one of mine My sorrow knows no limit It flows threw my heart and soul Just like my hatred for the world. I walk a path of darkness and dispair Hideing in the shadows of humanity's fears. My mind clouded by a mist of uncertainty But still i create misery and pain. Driven away by those who fear and dispise me I was thought to be a weapon of war....... And there thoughts were correct. My destructive power surpasses that of a humans But my only desire is to bring chaos To this miserable world. My rage will engulf the planet In darkness and in flames. Humanity's hatred for me is what drives these intentions. I'll watch as it falls apart in a sea of darkness
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Posted: Thu Feb 22, 2007 8:56 pm
shadowwolf23 wow awsome poem i totally love it heart okay heres one of mine My sorrow knows no limit It flows threw my heart and soul Just like my hatred for the world. I walk a path of darkness and dispair Hideing in the shadows of humanity's fears. My mind clouded by a mist of uncertainty But still i create misery and pain. Driven away by those who fear and dispise me I was thought to be a weapon of war....... And there thoughts were correct. My destructive power surpasses that of a humans But my only desire is to bring chaos To this miserable world. My rage will engulf the planet In darkness and in flames. Humanity's hatred for me is what drives these intentions. I'll watch as it falls apart in a sea of darkness That's very interesting. Like something you'd hear from a movie from the point of view of a demon or a chaotic demigod. Pretty cool, I'd say. A couple of spelling errors, but it was a good poem. I'm going to lighten things up a little with another of my poems. To be Human Gracefully, I danced.Then tripped over the hem of my pants. With confidence, I spoke.Then forgot the punch line of my joke. Joyfully, I sang.Then stubbed my toe and yelped in pain. I confronted my crush.Then stuttered, trembled, frowned, and blushed. With pizazz, I walked.Then tripped on a hot dog. To this day I am mocked. At least I tried.Even though my dignity was fried.
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Posted: Sun Feb 25, 2007 9:39 am
I walk the crooked path
Trying to contain my wrath
Am I good or am i bad? i am really not sure
A stranger in my own skin where does it end?
Not a friend understands me
They just want to just brand me
Do not fit into there mold
my soul it feels so old
so i walk my path alone
do not want to cry out on the phone
No understanding has been shown
Walk in a world of of people yet i stand as one
Would like to be part of something
Knowing that would be great
But i walk alone unsure of my fate
down down the path down i go
past the oaks with there ancient knowing
Keep walking head down staring at the ground
Where the path ends i will find
like a pact it surely binds
left and right up and down
twisting turning
my stomach is a churning
Is life a dream?
something obscene
am i in my bed?
sleeping with my head
Are dreams reality?
and reality the dream?
I question it all off the path i should fall
to my death no more breath
maybe life is a bad dream
i just want to scream!!!
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Posted: Sun Feb 25, 2007 9:45 am
Kassassin shadowwolf23 wow awsome poem i totally love it heart okay heres one of mine My sorrow knows no limit It flows threw my heart and soul Just like my hatred for the world. I walk a path of darkness and dispair Hideing in the shadows of humanity's fears. My mind clouded by a mist of uncertainty But still i create misery and pain. Driven away by those who fear and dispise me I was thought to be a weapon of war....... And there thoughts were correct. My destructive power surpasses that of a humans But my only desire is to bring chaos To this miserable world. My rage will engulf the planet In darkness and in flames. Humanity's hatred for me is what drives these intentions. I'll watch as it falls apart in a sea of darkness That's very interesting. Like something you'd hear from a movie from the point of view of a demon or a chaotic demigod. Pretty cool, I'd say. A couple of spelling errors, but it was a good poem. I'm going to lighten things up a little with another of my poems. To be Human Gracefully, I danced.Then tripped over the hem of my pants. With confidence, I spoke.Then forgot the punch line of my joke. Joyfully, I sang.Then stubbed my toe and yelped in pain. I confronted my crush.Then stuttered, trembled, frowned, and blushed. With pizazz, I walked.Then tripped on a hot dog. To this day I am mocked. At least I tried.Even though my dignity was fried. Nice poem it shows your humanity I like it
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