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Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2011 1:04 am
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Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2011 9:37 am
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Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2011 10:26 am
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....all right... I think the main thing I would say is that I don't think the screencaps of the forum posts are doing a lot here. You can't read them and they're not very interesting to look at, so I don't think that those will really get anyone's attention or give any important information beyond the fact that this is a Gaia guild (and even then people who aren't on Gaia might be like 'WTF is this'. I'm guessing this is made for people already ON Gaia, but if it isn't, it might not be a bad idea to mention Gaia Online and suggest for people to register there, bring some more people in).
I'd suggest instead showing some more pictures instead of the screen caps; for instance show a bunch of various aesthetically-pleasing sprite arts of various users and forms; like you could show the starters like MarLucy with her Tanemon, and then show the badass avatars like Unitas with one of his Megas or something later. Show a lot of variety in both the Digimon and the avatars, y'dig? I think people might be drawn to that. With the RPing and the forum business, I don't think there's a lot you can communicate there, so my suggestion would be more pictures like the ones already in there, (the one with the Tamers main characters was cool) showcasing various cool action scenes and stuff. Alternatively, you could list some easy-to-read bullets of some of the subforums within the guild to let people know what kind of stuff the guild has to offer. Maybe Card Battling could be one of those bullets or maybe you just show a bunch of pictures of various cards, but I think it might just be best to have a bullet or a note saying that we have a 'card-based battle system;' I think that would be the most accurate.
Overall I wasn't wild about it, I thought it was sort of too long (relative to commercials) and it felt slow because of the long shots where you're forced to watch the screencaps. It wasn't the best commercial I've ever seen but it wasn't terrible either. Hope this helps; I might be harsh with my criticism sometimes, but I always have improvement in mind when I do so.
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Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2011 11:07 am
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Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2011 12:15 pm
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