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Well, like how all the others said in the comments, I loved it! Great job! I only read the prologue, I didn't go ahead(unless you want me to, to give out my opinion on it) I liked how you didn't introduce the character like in certain stories like,
"Hey! I'm Jon Doe, I was doing something at some place around whatever o' clock I turned my head to see these group of dogs! I began to run--- My hand fit perfectly, I gave my wish."
Sure you may have related with the character but, It would have been a hard time to get into the mood that you set forth.
Halfway through the reading I just thought that it would actually be a short story, but the ending was great! (Though, you seem to excel with short stories, just sayin', I think you would be good in it) I wasn't confused at all, you eased into the plot, keeping the reader from being confused by the different frequency.
The only thing I can personally say is that, there was a lack of detail in some parts. Though, that doesn't seem to be a major problem, since people reading the books will just imagine what's happening, characteristcs, and environment when it's presented.
I definitely enjoyed reading the Prologue. I give it a 9/10 since I haven't read too much into the story to know what's going on later, y'know? Great Job!! biggrin
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