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I wish that you were with me
Whispering in my ear
In that deep,enchanting voice
That I’m always glad to hear
I wish that we were standing
Together side by side
Walking on the beach
Near the rising tide
But all I can do is wait
Wait for your return
Wait for your gleaming eyes
And the gaze of which I yearn
I hope with all my heart
That you’ll return somtime soon
But until that time
I'll simply wait for you
- by sweetgirl101209 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/17/2010 |
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- Title: I wish
- Artist: sweetgirl101209
- Description: an edit of one of my older poems...comments would be greatly appreciated
- Date: 07/17/2010
- Tags: wish wait love
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Xiang-jiao - 07/22/2010
- This is pretty good. All I can really say is: "Keep writing" and I'm sure you'll turn into a great writer one day.
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- PenguinGirl11 - 07/19/2010
- its really lovely. one suggestion though, the third stanza is kind of awkward with the "wait"s so if you could try to make it more parallel... if you know what i mean. its really good though, i like it, 5/5. ^__^
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- MissSaylah - 07/17/2010
- aww that was beautiful ^_^ great job! 5 stars all the way
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