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You are the light,
the sparkle in my eyes.
The atmosphere changes suddenly
when you're around.
Everything feels lighter,
the sun starts shining brighter.
I'm floating on air,
I'm weightless.
3/31/10
- by EmoKisses-x |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/31/2010 |
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- Title: Weightless
- Artist: EmoKisses-x
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Description:
Another one of my poems
that I came up with fairly quickly.
Sometimes I'll think of random quotes,
then make a poem.
When making this,
I randomly got
"The light,the sparkle in my eyes"
& then I just came up with the rest.
Comment & Rate Please(:
<3 - Date: 03/31/2010
- Tags: weightless
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Comments (4 Comments)
- XxZombieQueenxX - 06/22/2010
- this is nice. 4/5
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- Haiizel Nut - 04/06/2010
- Not bad. I like it C: Simple <3
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- Aribis - 04/03/2010
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Nice. The beginning reminds me of Twilight, but that's all. What I would have changed is the 3rd and 4th line. I would have done something like:
The atmophsere changes,
Suddenly you're around.
Seems to flow better...maybe? - Report As Spam
- EmoKisses-x - 04/02/2010
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