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the one you were killing
the life you were taking
the blood you were spilling
the world you were changing,
i wont take your pity
i wont act surprised,
youll never forgive me
youll always tell lies
im never going
to pretend that i care
a look in your eyes
a f#%cking night mare.
treat me like a demon
i do these things wrongly
youll laugh as i cry
and through roses on me.
even if i were
to scream to the sky
it would fall down upon me
and leave me to die.
stop me if im
going on to long
but its hard to die
while your writing a song.
- Title: all your fault
- Artist: jyrolyn
- Description: every other line rhymes, it should be done with the rythym of 4/4. it should be screamed. ill post verse 2 later.
- Date: 03/13/2010
- Tags: your fault
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Comments (3 Comments)
- jyrolyn - 03/25/2010
- thanks!
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- Tomas Youngblood - 03/20/2010
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its great. lol, dont forget all poetry doesnt have to ryhme. i like the flow of this one, its very well done.....5/5 (plz rate and comment mine)
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- Purple_Pearl_Girl - 03/13/2010
- This is good. I like lines 14, 15, and 16. I wish I had a suggestion but it seems to good to me.
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