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Infinite in the world; finite in oblivion
Stories like a modern day Alice in Wonderland
Tick tock, tick tock
Keep watching the clock
The Red Queen screams "Off with her head"
And yet, still nobody's dead.
It's in the tea
The poison of the free
Shackles on the Hare and the Hatter
Still, it doesn't seem to matter
'Cuz when the Cheshire grins
Well, then everyone wins
The White Queen with her Knight
Seemed nary a fright
Then the Red Queen turned around
And the new Alice had been crowned
What happens now?
Something the Red One's can't allow
The tables have been turned
An ace drawn in a deck to be learned
Every card been mistreated
And the Duchess feels cheated
Time to rebel
Lash out with every cell
Even the doormouse seems content with the plan
The Red Queen reaches her span
And Alice remains victorious.
The Queen's dessets just scruptious
Tick tock, tick tock
In the world of Wonderland, everything's up to mock
Now the queen's gone and Wonderland is alive
Nothing left to try to survive
Infinity is forever and finity is the Queen's legacy.
- by Phayth Less |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/11/2010 |
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- Title: Infinite Wonderland
- Artist: Phayth Less
- Description: I need feedback on this, like real feedback, because I want to do a final draft for a contest. Help?
- Date: 02/11/2010
- Tags: infinite wonderland
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Comments (6 Comments)
- MasterOfTheShadows - 03/29/2011
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I wish i could give you more than 5 Stars, mah lady.
You once told me that you're not very good at poetry, this certainly says otherwise. - Report As Spam
- Phayth Less - 03/29/2010
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Just so everyone knows: I've actually READ both Alice in Wonderland and Through the Looking Glass. I know who the Jabberwocky is and I know I didn't put every single character in. It would have cluster ******** the whole poem if I would have.
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- Grell R Sutcliff - 02/20/2010
- What about the jabberwock? he's the dragon thing btw... on the red queens side. does he lose? it's a very good piece. love it.
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- Amazon_Chik - 02/18/2010
- Wow!! Just WOW! Really Amazing! *thumbs up*
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- dykecore - 02/18/2010
- Love it! You most certainly have talent. It is amazing. Good luck to you!
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- To-Chi VIII - 02/16/2010
- You, ma'am, are awesome. I take it this is inspired by the new Alice d'Wonderland movie. Well, okay it's not French, but it sounded cool in my head... Just like your poem biggrin *Clap clap clap*
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