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drowning...suffocating...darkness...
this is all i feel, all i see, if i was able to.
caught up in my own darkness....numb...not feeling anything.....not hearing anything.....not thinking.......if any thinking....only of darkness
"can't breath"....."lost"......"cold"
then i see something
for the first time, i feel
i hear
but what do i hear
.....oh...its my name....someone is calling me, and i feel......anger? no. saddness? no. ahhh....i know
happiness.
someone calls my name, and i see light
coming closer, breaking the surface....!!
and i'm there.
embraced in warm arms...
i sigh.
i am loved.
i am saved.
- by Franny_hottie |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/06/2010 |
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- Title: Saved
- Artist: Franny_hottie
- Description: one more i wrote. plz rate and comment! ^^
- Date: 01/06/2010
- Tags: saved
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Lilac-ish - 01/06/2010
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Not bad. C:
You abuse ellipses a lot though. --- (...) are ellipses ---
I'd recommend trying to find a different way to create pauses. - Report As Spam
- BasedCringe69 - 01/06/2010
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Oh my god.... Very pretty. May I repeat VERY pretty.
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