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that night
that night i was with you
that night i was crying for you
that night i was scared for you
that night i beleaved you wont come back
that night i was dumb enough to let you go
that night when you left i died for your pleasure of love
- by itachi_blood_death |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/28/2009 |
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- Title: ThAt NiGhT
- Artist: itachi_blood_death
- Description: that night
- Date: 12/28/2009
- Tags: night
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- BloodStainLoveStory - 01/04/2010
- not bad, not bad, just needs a sense of flow and more length, other than that its great. 4/5. check out my stuff smile
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- LaurenLullaby - 12/31/2009
- I like it, but it could use some sort of rhyming method so that it can flow together and the ending is not well thought out. You should add a little more so that it does not come to such a sudden halt. Keep up the good work, though, once you begin, there will be room for improvement. <3
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