SPIRAL

• Artist: Cheonei Ayu
• Description: I made this poem a long time ago but never thought to submit it; now that I've remembered, here it is ^^
  
  ~ Plz rate it and give me truthful answers so I can do better next time ^^
  
• Date: 12/12/2009
• Tags: spiral

SPIRAL

Part 1

To destroy...
is our destiny...
To create...
is our future...
To live...
is our nightmare...
To make friends...
is forbidden...

Part 2

To change fate...
is impossible...
unless you believe...
in the Iris flowers...
as in this story..

~ Ayu

Comments

[raeflower]

I don't know that much about poetry, but even though your phrases are short it has good a good flow to it, and that's what I noticed. *thumbs up.