Mirage

• Artist: ThisIsMyDeathbed_x
• Description: This one's slightly different from the rest (I'm experimenting) it’s set in a desert and is about the struggle of a man to survive. However, there’s 2 meanings. It relates to a physical struggle, as well as a mental one. The theme is dealing with problems in the past. For example, "a bed of sand to rest my yellow head upon" describes the setting, but also says that the man can't deal with pressure and is a coward (not a good enough explanation? Msg me. id be happy dappy doo to help you)
• Date: 10/18/2009
• Tags: mirage desert struggles problems death

The sun is ablaze.

Baked and shrivelled like a
Potato skin, I stagger on.
Vast nothingness surrounds.
A bed of sand to rest my yellow head upon
A curtain of blue that’s waiting for the

Show to start, and life to end.
Aphids have left plants dry and brutal
To emphasise my sanded tongue.

Trying to guzzle the empty contents of my flask,
I curl to the floor and clamp my ears shut
With dry sandy hands,
But still I hear the desert eagle’s wings,
And the slurping of assassin bugs as they drink my life away.

Miraculously, the sand bleeds before my eyes,
And a fresh stream of water spurts
Only a short distance away.

A short distance.
A reaching distance.
Hope.
Great god almighty, HOPE.

I press my face into the stream with
A croak of joy.
I cup my hands and throw beauty in the air
I watch it confetti around me before I plunge my hands in once more.
I cough as water tumbles down my throat
It feels hot.
It feels solid.
It feels dry.
It feels like misery

I fall back against my bed,
Defeated.
As my eyelids flicker closed over
Crusty balls of pain,
I hear the cackles that come from
God - My audience.

Comments

[King of Trash]

I ususally don't like Poems that don't ryme... However... This poem was almost hilariously morbid.. It really is a work of art... excellent job my dear...

[DDrox316]

is this a metaphor for something... real? because i'm pretty sure you're not in the real desert if you're typing this up XP
its good smile i like it, i like the description biggrin

[ThisIsMyDeathbed_x]

yeeey! biggrin that's the feeling i wanted to create. woop woop woop! biggrin

[Vulcan Enterprise]

This is really very good. I will admit, there were some metaphors i did not understand fully, but other than that, it was amazing.
especially the imagery.
it was like i was there.

[Definition_Of_It]

ANOTHER ONE!
Maaaaan, you're no half on the role todayyy xd
You only ever publish them when i'm online, don't you? ;P
Oooor, like you did this morning, you phone and TELL me to go on xd

Aaaaanyways, awesome as ever biggrin i like this idea of hidden messages and stuff. To be honest, i can't actually see any of the hidden messages, other than the obvious one that you pointed out. sweatdrop razz Don't tell our english teacher though, she'll have a HEARTATTACK. xd