Love me, Love me not

• Artist: ThisIsMyDeathbed_x
• Description: Hello yet again. It's a POEM again - and this one isn't about DEATH! :O Are you shocked? you should be - i'm trying to change my ways you see. This one's about a guy (the grass) getting dumper by a girl (the blossom) so she can be with another guy (the wind)
  
  The whole thing's one big metaphor - hope you like it :D RATE AND COMMENT as usual :)
• Date: 09/16/2009
• Tags: love breakup sadness brokenheart tears

One lone blossom buds on a mountain.
A blossom they name Love -
Love because it’s wild, free,
Shimmering white against a sea of jealousy.

One lone petal is ripped away,
The first tear as the world breaks down.
The wind is battling for Love’s heart
Taking part of her away each time
Soon all her tranquillity is gone

As the blossom takes the wind’s hand in marriage,
The grass begins to sob.

Now the one lone field of grass withers on a mountain.
The grass they call Loneliness.
Loneliness because it’s stuck there, bitter,
Fading duller with a broken heart...

Comments

[ThisIsMyDeathbed_x]

thank yooou! smile
Naaaah, my work's never got a flow to it. it's kinda because i write about life thats all over the place, and the lack of flow represents that smile

[cre8ive_ovadose]

I love this! The flow's not quite there but is it ever with your pieces?? smile Good job 5/5

[ThisIsMyDeathbed_x]

Thank you thank you thank you thank you!!!!!! biggrin

yeash, Doug razz That IS where the title came from. Related forwards to the poem indeed, especially as the wind is pulling the flower bit by bit smile
Hah, me? genious? Naah, i just actually use my little brain, unlike SOME PEOPLE who seem to forget they actually possess one wink

[Definition_Of_It]

Aaaaaw, you've did it again. I've got tears in my eyes - real friggin' tears! :O
Excellent, uber amazingly spectacularly perfect smile

i love that line about "the blossom takes tthe wind's hand in marriage" xd It's so noice! And the title : that's to do with the game that you pull the letters off and say "he/she loves me, he/she loves me not" isn't it? Cuz if it is, maaan, that suits the whole poem and is utterly GEN-I-OUS! xd 5/5, if you hadn't already guessed that wink