The wisdom of the rain

• Artist: candarck
• Description: this is a older peace of work! but i thought i should share it.
• Date: 09/06/2009
• Tags: rain wisdom

Where time stands still,
where past and future collide,
where the sea of time has gathered,
storing mysteries in the tide.
there gather up in droplets,
your wisdom as a rain.
everyyhing i ask of you,
i compel you to explain.

Comments

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ooh, I love this! I love the rhythm, and how everyother line rhymes. it doesn't make it sound cheesy, like rhyming every line does.
the words you use are also very descriptive. I like that you thought to use the word 'compel.' it has a unique quality to it, as a word, more gentle than 'force' but firmer than 'cajole.'