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Your first impression wasn't your best.
I could see you're not as pure.
So trust me when I say,
The feeling's mutual, I'm sure.
The second impression was the worst.
Someone now rides in a hearse.
You haven't found the cure,
So the feeling's mutual, I'm sure.
Third times the charm,
But don't push your luck.
For the feeling's only mutual.
And now you I can't trust.
Now i see the evil you bare.
You tried to turn my brain.
The feeling's now less than mutual,
Cause He didn't die in vain.
- by Angel Of Purified Light |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/04/2009 |
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- Title: The Feeling's Mutual
- Artist: Angel Of Purified Light
- Description: I wrote this poem for a class. Give your full critiscism as well as you can. I want to try to improve my writing skills, so your thoughts would help me. Thank you.
- Date: 09/04/2009
- Tags: feelings mutual
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Angel Of Purified Light - 09/12/2009
- Pretty gallery btw
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- Angel Of Purified Light - 09/12/2009
- lol, Thanks
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- Zankaku - 09/11/2009
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pretty
you can visit my gallery, my original www.hzp.deviantart.com - Report As Spam
- Angel Of Purified Light - 09/09/2009
- Thank you
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- mizchievous - 09/06/2009
- very nice!
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- Angel Of Purified Light - 09/05/2009
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That's what poems are supposed to do
They make you think
Btw, I'm talking about temptation - Report As Spam
- EveryWakingMoment333 - 09/05/2009
- hmmm....i like it but im confused a little as to what its about. good though smile
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