Fun

• Artist: lilmizlankie
• Description: About a girl that has been departed...
• Date: 08/26/2009
• Tags: freedermfreelittleperson

Fun
I don't know what that is
Being somewhere where no one can find me
It's sad and lonely down there
But at least i'll be good at hide and seek
only one day i couls play.

When i was down there
It feel so lonely and cold
One time i could here little boys and girls playing outside
I tried to call to them but they didn't hear me
All that time i was there it was cold
Cold inside and out of me
I beg you to help me

In that place I wanted to see what it was like outside
To feel the freash air on my face and thought my hair
To one day see the sun set ans sun rise
Be like those little boys and girls and play outside
But if only I could
That person said to stay down here in this horriable place
I beg you to help me

That person it sometimes mean to me
Telling me that I can't go out when i ask that person
Also that person hits me
And ask to me to do things I don't understand
I beg you to help me

That day, That special day
I heared a knock on the front door
Hearing it made me think of freederm
I saw a shodod over by the door
I ran over to it and started shout to let me out
So I was free

F R E E D E R M Its more than just a word.

Comments

[Fyrewalle]

Hmm, i think it would be a lot better if you spelt everything correctly. I got lost trying to decipher what you were saying. But overall not to bad, not exactly my cup of tea, but with a bit of fine tuning you could producing something great. 2/5.