Sunny Spot

• Artist: Kuchuni
• Description: I step in the sunny spot...
  
  A poem that I worte when I was afraid of life and what would happen to me later on as I grew older.
• Date: 07/27/2009
• Tags: sunny spot

I step in the sunny spot
Surronded by shade
People are passing me
But I still stay.

I stand in the sunny spot
Watching the clouds
They seem so dark, so large
So very far away.

I stand in the sunny spot
Alone for now
Unitl I step onward
To the shade beyond.

I leave the sunny spot
And look behind
It beckons at me
Looking warm and well.

I walk away from the sunny spot
Leaving it behind
Let someone else step in
And look up at the sky.

Comments

[Diosa de Armarrio]

very nice. I like the imagery behind it.

[PixelShank]

hey thanks for the rate! and I like this poem, it flows nice :]

[METRO SKiiES]

Nice poem. It's simple but gets its message across. I think the metaphor really does get itself across, taking a risk to keep living when you could just stand in a nice, safe place for a long time. That's the most effective part of the poem, I would say. It's pretty average overall, though. It could use a rhyme scheme or more sensory language. It's a very good start though - keep writing, and I think you could do lots with your poetry in time.

[speckeh]

Haha! And that's where I go every day to watch my clouds and go. "Man, Masha needs to come over soon." ^^ It's really pretty masha. I liked it alot.

[DreamInfinitely]

Yay! Bravo Masha!!! 5/5!!

[l AccountError l]

Interesting. 4/5 ;]

[FoxfireAsaliEcara]

Love it.