Bodyguard (All I ask)

• Artist: Widowmaker098
• Description: A poem of what lengths I would go thru to make my love feel good.
• Date: 07/13/2009
• Tags: bodyguard widowmaker098 girl love

I'd hold onto you forever if I could,
Even when you fall and cry definatly I would.
I'll protect you from all the worlds pain if you let me,
I'll be your bodyguard and take a bullet for you for free.

I love you with all my heart baby girl and I wish you knew,
How much I feel for you and what I'd do for you.
I'll be your bodyguard and do everything for free,
All I ask in return is that you always love me.

Comments

[Colieman5]

simple changes could have helped the flow.

EX) "definatly I would."
could have been
"I definaltly would"

and "I'd hold onto you forever if I could"
could have been
"I would cling to you forever if i could"

work on your vocab and syntax.

[ThrashMetal_14]

awh.that was touching. :] *four stars i bet she's a lucky girl.