Crumbling Mind

• Artist: BibleBoy
• Description: It's about how I was feeling around a month or two ago. Not nearly as dark as some of my other stuff. It's also a Pantoum (It's a form of poetry) Of course, it was my first attempt, so I did slightly mess up near the end and only realized it much later.
  
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• Date: 06/22/2009
• Tags: crumbling mind

My mind is crumbling,
Its thoughts tumbling.
Finally breaking apart,
What was ripped from the start.

Its thoughts tumbling;
My mind tearing it faster.
What was ripped from the start,
Now a walking disaster.

My mind tearing faster,
I wonder when it will end.
Now a walking disaster,
Will it ever mend?

I wonder when it will end.
Finally breaking apart
Will it ever mend?
My mind is crumbling.

Comments

[MademoiselleHarmonie]

It's a bit reptive-ish.

[BibleBoy]

Thank you. And yes, I love poetry as well as writing stories.

[Exiled Demon Angel]

Your rhyme scheme and scantion are very well done. I'm Impressed of the quality of your poem. I bet making poems are one of your hobbies.