Song/poem for a friend

• Artist: Heatless1ne
• Description: This is something i wrote for a friend...i am still editing it but o well...... I had this feeling about a song/poem to represent both my friend and I so i hope you like it ^^
• Date: 06/01/2009
• Tags: songpoem friend

A question mark on my heart,
A thought on my soul,

Never will I surrender my control,
Though the days call me to move,

I question life as a whole,
Never I wander without a toll,

My life seems less important,
My control asks for more,

I am lost in a world I know,
To me it seems I am out of control,

I want to be found,
but knowing full well I must find my own way home.

Comments

[b00_2]

In the beginning, there are straightforward rhymes like soul, control, whole, toll.
But towards the end the rhymes turn into near rhymes like home, control, know.
It doesn't sound right towards the end because of the change of rhymes.