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Are those your teeth if feel
Biting into my side
Glowing grey and metallic?
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Will you stop- No don’t
I’ll be the victim
I’ll be your specimen
The cadaver sprawled out
On that black wax operating table.
Show me the scalpel
Glowing silver and starved
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I’ll be your lab partner-
I’ll be your lab-
If you’ll show me your hunger
Let me look at all that keeps you empty
Show me what I’m made of,
Before it crosses your lips.
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Show me what I’m made of-
All that silver and grey.
- by TheKhamaseen |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/24/2009 |
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- Title: Silver and Shining
- Artist: TheKhamaseen
- Description: it's a poem- critiques are welcome
- Date: 05/24/2009
- Tags: silver shining
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Sunafire - 05/30/2009
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I don't understand the dots between the Stanza's but with all the imagery going on, it makes me like it.
You could improve by adding a little more punctuation to make it fluent and maybe elaborating on the focus more. - Report As Spam
- hot cherries101 - 05/26/2009
- wtf is that and your gonna say crap about my poem!?!?!?!
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- Idiosyncratic Quirk - 05/25/2009
- I don't know what the dissection is supposed to symbolize. >_< I still give this a solid 3.
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