building a bridge

• Artist: IlIPhsycotic Rampagelll
• Description:
• Date: 04/30/2009
• Tags: building bridge

im loosing control
falling apart,
breaking down
dying inside
throwing away
all of the stuff
that i thought i knew
and rebuilding myself,
i wont believe
you anymore,
im building a bridge
and climbing over,
i dont need u
to complete myself,
i have myself
and no-one else
im loosing control
falling apart
breaking down
dying inside
throwing away
everything
and,
making a new me
to live with forever
cuz i dont need u
to live with myself

Comments

[ThrilIer]

I agree with the comment below.

[Llywelyn Fawr]

A little bit confusing, but I get what your saying. Nice rhythm though. Maybe make from "and," onward a new strophe (stanza). I don't know if you used abbreviations just for this posting, but if you didn't change those to the full spellings. It looks unprofessional if you keep them. That's really it.

[Jess love dogs]

I love the poem !!! I need to do the same thing ..... Build a new bridge and start over. 5/5 stars : )

[Moon1002]

I love it ^^