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The whisper of the wind, softly caressed my cheek, as it carried itself in full motion, causing the yellow sea of wheat before me, to ripple in its rhythm. And I, the sheltered small town girl, listened to its mournful sound.
- by Violet Embers13 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/20/2009 |
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- Title: Whisper
- Artist: Violet Embers13
- Description: I wrote this yesterday and I wasn't quite sure why. I :heart: criticism! Just don't be nasty because you can!
- Date: 04/20/2009
- Tags: whisper
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Violet Embers13 - 04/23/2009
- Thanks. I am brainstorming about this, so I will add on soon.
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- xDonnyx - 04/21/2009
- I would agree. Great start. Build up on it. This would be a good end maybe.
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- clumsy-story of my life - 04/21/2009
- i agree with the person below me only because its so good that u should have made it longer. I love this tho!!! great personification and metaphors!
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- JackRabbit247 - 04/20/2009
- u should have kept this aside and built from this idea. eventually more ideas will grow from.
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