-
10/18/06 (1) – Pandora’s Box
Life is endless,
When you’re young,
And time is on your side,
But everything changes.
And to understand,
Life’s mysteries,
You must first experience,
For yourself,
Pandora’s box of emotion,
For life’s mysteries and experience,
Are priceless and irreplaceable.
- by rocko11091 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/21/2009 |
- Skip
- Title: Pandora's Box
- Artist: rocko11091
-
Description:
This is the title piece of my personal poetry collection...its rather ironic that I've been writing for 5 years and now I have finally decided to release some of my poems for criticism...this isnt the best one I have, but sums up my feeling on age and experience...which is why it is called Pandora's Box
Please write meaningfull comments with at least one piece of constructive criticism...if you dont know what that is, then please, by all means, ask... - Date: 03/21/2009
- Tags:
- Report Post
Comments (2 Comments)
- rocko11091 - 04/02/2009
- thank you for the bit of constructive crit...ill gladly look into it....glad to see im not the only one that believes in this...
- Report As Spam
- Sunafire - 03/30/2009
-
There's something strange, eeire, and suprisingly truthful about this poem, and I like it.
I think the only constructive criticism I can give would be to place something between the first and second Stanza, because to me, the jump between the two feels awkward.
That's my personal view though, as i'm sure you'll understand smile - Report As Spam