Renewal

• Artist: notarocketscientist
• Description: A poem i wrote for english class.
• Date: 03/15/2009
• Tags: renewal

The will to live burns bright as fire
but is snuffed out by reality
only to be lit once more
by divine hands
renewed
restored
alive again.

Comments

[sweetricebunny]

I think this has exceptional quality use of words. However, it all sounds like one big sentence with a lot of commas. I was hoping you could fix that one small teeny problem.

[notarocketscientist]

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