me and the world

• Artist: princess lizzymarie
• Description: it is describing on how i feel and everything around me (srry if the thing doesnt sound good im still working on it but to me i think its ok i guess lol)
• Date: 02/22/2009
• Tags: world

Me and The World

Love is usless to me,
When thinking about the misery.

People look above,
To find endless love.
But i look at the ground,
For i haven't been found.

Why doesn't the world stand still?
for the spinning makes me ill!

I have been so lost without you,
so now what should i do?

i feel like im in a ball,
how will you catch me when i fall?

And now i feel so cold,
cause without you its so bold.

Please let me no what i should do,
just lind me a simple clue.

Otherwise i'll die without.....you. cry

Comments

[XxTwilight_01xX]

I give you a four...it was brilliant, so full of emotion and everything. But at the end I kind of got lost and didn't know what u were talking about....

[MasterEverwaking]

it's good overall, the emotion comes through well.
two of the lines though, ball/fall line and the still/ill line could be better.
4/5

[Iggy Blank]

Pretty good poem, although it needs better rhymes and it some parts better spelling. Good job, other than those last few bits.