Gone Alone

• Artist: T 4 L K I N G T 0 4 S T
• Description: A poem When I was sad and alone............. xD (when I was little like about 8)
  
• Date: 01/28/2009
• Tags: gone alone

Everything is building up with tention
Yet Im not there for attention
My tears are big and dripping from my cheek
You can hear them wherever you seek

Im sad at what they did and how I reacted
Yet Im mad at how they were acting
with my heart slowing down and beating hard
my blood is flowing with fear and Im crying harder

Sitting at the edge of a brick wall looking in the woods
Im at the edge of my life grasping to get a hold of what would happen
Thinking what to do I fight my fears
I get up and tighten my fists and hold back the tears

I walk away leaving the future to be questioned in a fold
I talk to myself saying don't hold back.... Keep moving on

Comments

[xx-to teh e n d]

I agree with Moonlight, more of a story. But if you could like rearrange it it could be much better. 4/5

[Moonlight_Maiden123]

i get wot ur saying, but the powm its self well, is off. u have no rhyming sceam and no pattern. its like its telling a story instead of telling a poem story. now if u alter it a bit im sure it would turn out awsome! ^^

[mayling_10]

nice