Two Words.

• Artist: Malicious Pikachu
• Description: This is for my Father. When he left me when I was little.
• Date: 01/18/2009
• Tags: words

Those two words, that he never said,
Only two words, seeming locked away, or hidden, covered and tangled up in dread,
Only two words, to internally hide, to walk among the shadows, consuming my pride,
Only two words, unsaid and left out,
Two words, to never be heard or found out.

In all my life, I've been filled with pain,
The only thing to calm me,
The sweet sound of the fresh falling rain,
It's pounding and pouring reminded me of how I cried,
Over those two words, left unspoken,
Only Two.. "Good-Bye"

Comments

[rocko11091]

must have been rough....a bit of consolation....very well written poem...nice flow...bit choppy towards the end but overall flow is good...nice use of personification, but try to use a bit more imagery...
Concept: 4.5/5
Style: 3.5/5 (original, but it conflicts with the flow)
Flow: 3/5
Figurative Language/Imagery: 3/5
Overall: 3.25 (3)

[Silverphang13]

I could feel your emotion in this poem. I loved it very sad.

[Galapagos Squid]

Aww how sad =(
But well written, nicely done

[Moonlight_Maiden123]

oh that was said D: but i like this poem good job