suicide girl

• Artist: iI_L0V3_Y00Hli
• Description: A GIRL WHO IS PICKED ON AT SCHOOL AND DECIDES TO COMMIT SUICIDE :(
• Date: 01/18/2009
• Tags: suicide girl

They told me school was the best days of our lives
but too me it was like getting hit by a thousand sharp knives
i dont understand why people shout things so unkind
then i need a week to recover and unwind
but then one day everything went down hill
i got butterflies in my stomach i saw the dream i had to forfill
but this dream had no happy ending
i wrote my mum the text message and started sending
within this text message were a few harsh things
but it finished by saying i was now an angel up above id finally grown wings
as i sat in the woods my heart started too race
and the salty tears started to stream down my face
i tied the rope round my kneck so thick and tight
jumped off the tree with all my might
as i dangled in the air all pale and weak
my mum was ringing the police for any help she could seak
when the search party found me i was now breathless and cold
they rang up my parents the devastating news was then told
my mum hit the floor whilst crying out her heart
she looked at my foo from earlier my bitten jam tart
she frowned in despare as i was no longer there
but under that frown a small smile appeared
she new i was now in a better place but why i did it was the reason she most feared !

BY,iI_L0V3_Y00Hli

Comments

[-o-VampireChic-o-]

Its great, just work on your grammer and spelling. I can relate and the poem had that nice speed of when you read and your heart start racing. Good job, just use the word check and grammer sweetie ^^ 4/5 (Only because of grammer)

[Jun Hagi]

i can almost relate, i felt like commiting suicide before i met my two best friends and learned to love living ^_^

[Reprogrammed]

I can relate to this poem since i've tried to commit suicide 3 times; it almost made me cry.

[xX_emo girl18_Xx]

i gess spelling need check but its k its beautiful i liked it

[lemonfox]

good but the spelling needs checked.

[Merei Lulai]

This is nice. But I would work on checking your spelling and such.
^.^