Time With You

• Artist: jmd021902
• Description: This poem is a story of two human who fell in love with each other.
• Date: 01/12/2009
• Tags: time with love tears despair

You make me laugh.
You make me fly.
You make my life
A significant one.

I'm waiting for you for so long,
But now you came into my life,
I won't let you go.
I'm gonna hold you tight
And never let you fly.

But I don't know what happen
To heart of mine,
I suddenly get tired
And let you fly.

Now, I'm in despair.
Tears are flowing in my eyes.
If I just get back the time,
The time I'm with you,
A friend of mine.

Comments

[2good2beforgoten]

this is good, but in the line where it says;
I'm waiting for you for so long, should say; I've waited for you for so long.

& than you should say in the line or add this to this line;
But, I dont know what to heart of mine,
add the word this before the word to.

than with this line, I suddely get tired, should say i suddenly got tired.


Sorry its just all proper grammer, but I do like the poem!