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Lifeless
I watched you breathe in
the midst of the silence today.
Thinking of how you would pay.
After the moon rose this night,
I decided this would be our last
flight
- by Neko_Kikimi |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/06/2008 |
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- Title: Lifeless
- Artist: Neko_Kikimi
- Description: Well...I checked out my stuff in teh Arenas then looked over to my faves and it said it was as lifeless as the moon. Poetry form: None really
- Date: 12/06/2008
- Tags: lifeless
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Fred 124 - 12/20/2008
- ...Is poetrist even a word?!? Isn't it just called a "poet"???
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- Sexuelle Marchen - 12/09/2008
- It dosn't flow together all that well, You should of re-worded it some before posting or have someone give you a hand. Also, Don't believe sweet, If she was a professional, she wouldn't use such horrid speech.
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- iiLil_emo_PuppeTii - 12/08/2008
- its very good.... dont mind the persons comment below... i a professional poetrist... i toke special classes..... and i passed with a 110... soo...yea.... dont listen to him.. very good job!! keep wrrting
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- Galindafied1 - 12/08/2008
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Very very good. But, it didn't flow very well. Try re-wording to make it sound like a heart beat or a song or something.
Otherwise, I love it. It's very good.
Look at some of my stuff? - Report As Spam
- Neko_Kikimi - 12/06/2008
- Please Comment!!! Minor critization so I can improve my skillz thx!!!
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