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The Bed
The time has come
I'm here at last.
My mind is racing
my heart beats fast.
My nerves of steel,
just turned to glass.
But I'll keep my promise
that you won't pass.
With shaking hands
I draw the line.
I see your face,
there isn't much time.
I call for aid,
we work togeather.
please don't drift off
into the nether.
If I fail you now
I couln't forget.
The smile you had
the first time we met.
Now here you are
fighting so hard.
I'm laying it down
my final trump card.
I pray to the lord
you won't go away.
I still have to tell you
"I love you" today.
A moment of silence,
my heart nearly stopped.
Still not a sound,
my stomach just dropped.
Time has slowed down,
this feels like forever.
No way to move on
or keep it togeather.
I drop to my kness
"what have I done?"
My world has been shattered
from loosing my one.
They bring in the thunder
it won't do much good.
It wasn't enough
the best that I could.
A hand on my shoulder,
it's your face I see.
Can it be true?
How can it be?
I guess you came back
although you are free.
I stare in your eyes
"Please forgive me"
A hug that says yes
and a kiss on the lip.
Don't say goodbye yet
don't let my heart rip.
It's your time to go
to the gates in the sky.
As you drift off
I can't help but cry.
I stand like a man
with respect for the dead.
Farewell my love,
sleep well in your bed.
- Title: The Bed
- Artist: Nochs
- Description: This one is about my dream of the medical field and my worst fear in it
- Date: 12/03/2008
- Tags: doctor death
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Rainbow cat FACE - 05/02/2009
- the rhyming didnt seem forced, like pretty much every other rhyming poem on here. the meter was pretty good too. it was off in a couple spots, but it was really strong in the beginning. 5/5 =D
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- whitejade13 - 12/25/2008
- I'm going to take the time to comment on TINSTAAFL's comment.Well yes, going back in your poem to correct mispelled words does show that you care about your work but as for the attracting your audience's attention, very few people care about your mispellings, it's the words themselves that matter not the spelling. And as for the "emo poem" comment, that is (parden my language) a load of crap. Ihave other things to say but i can only use 500 characters. I thought the poem was lovely. Kudos! smile
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- ll Nikkit ll - 12/13/2008
- alll i can say is wow T.T
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- susie1067 - 12/03/2008
- wow this is a really good poem. u have a good place in here, in the poem section, ur awesome biggrin
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- Praylaya - 12/03/2008
- Taking time to correct mispelled words helps you with attracting the audience's attention, and shows you care about your work. Nevertheless, it felt bland for the most part. Another "emo poem", and you titled it after the end? Spoiler alert.
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