ashamed

• Artist: Ms Make Me Smile
• Description: its about cutting,think what you want i imagine ill get bad ratings simply because of the topic,ok then its your opinion.thanks for commenting unless its mean in which case leave me alone.also stop saying go and kill yourself to people who write these things its a terrible thing to say but you can just write it and forget about the person but the person will go and do something way worse and die. comments are great.
• Date: 11/19/2008
• Tags: ashamed

i am ashamed of who i am now
why cant i just fix the problem
without resorting to these things

people hate what i do
it angers them
it never stops
feeding off me
killing me with precision
first detroying my body
then my mind
then i will fall to the ground
in an eternal sleep
never to awake
from this abis
living in this eternal abis
without even the knowledge of this is

my mind wonders how and when
will this stop
will i be found
lying on the bathroom
floor
without the beat of my already weak heart
or will i get so close to stopping
and then itll be too late
the last tick of the clock has rung
either way the only way to leave is
without a beating heart of me

Comments

[Overworkedandunderpaid]

Spelling needs work, but it's the kind of poetry I read and write. You could tweak it here and there to make it better, you don't have much rythm. Hmm, 1 out of 5...

[Ms Make Me Smile]

thanks for commenting

[haseo3105]

Beautiful, it brought me to tears. crying

[Ms Make Me Smile]

thanks for commmenting

[Nyclone]

Not bad, But the spelling and capitalization were a bit of a downer for me, but good work.