Immortal

• Artist: Seekcera
• Description: Is immorality really all that wonderful?
  
  I wrote this a wild back and I recently found it in the back of my binder. I edited it slightly, then decided to submit it. Tell me what you think of it! :)
• Date: 10/27/2008
• Tags: immortal

Dusk...
The end of another day,
For some...
The time to rest has come,
For some...
The end will never come,
For me...
I will never find peace,
As mortals do...

Is there no one?
Really no one?
No one that will come to help me?
To help me find the end?

I am an immortal,
And the end will never come.
The days will just go on,
And on...
And on...
And on...
'Til they all seem to merge,
Until time is done.

Dusk...
The end of another day,
For some...

Comments

[Jericho39]

It's a little empty, but it caught my attention.

[your initial diagnosis]

I don't really see anything about it.

[loony24680]

Not bad, could do with some beefing up a bit, seems a bit skin-and-bones-ey

[lil g man 2-6]

that was so beautiful -snifle- -tears-