Well, it rains and it pours

• Artist: DiexToxSurvive
• Description: hi now this poem is actually mine.... the title is from a my chem song (thank you my chemical romance!!!) but the rest of it is all MINE! i hope you like it! :)
• Date: 10/20/2008
• Tags: well rains pours murder

And with this one,
And only cut,
You fall to your knees,
Coughing up blood.

Your pathetic eyes,
Glaring up at me,
Just begging,
For mercy.

I think its time
To walk away.
I'll let my crimes,
Just wash away.

Maybe the rain,
Will ease your pain.
Or maybe I'll live in vain...

You're probably wondering why,
Why would I commit such things,
Why I live a life of sin?

The answer is simply,
Because I can.
You'll probably,
Never understand.

Comments

[LittleRavenWind]

I like it but you might want to work on your rhyme a little bit. The poem seemed a little bit choppy.

The title is okay I guess but its always better to have an original title. I don't feel like the title matches the poem.

[Tracker Ninja]

It would have been nice to have your own title. And I'm not sure if you tried to, but the stanza rhyming pain rain and vain sounds weird.

[Dice_Vampire_Ecstasy_Xx]

I love this! u have a talent!

[Cyanide Wolf]

happysadgtttg (reply): neither is System of a Down songnames ;D

[Llaria Lushious]

I am in LOVE with this ^^ 5/5 =]

[happysadgtttg]

The title doesn't really match the poem that well....but the poem itself is good.