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Can I smile again
Now that your gone
The moment it began
I knew it was wrong
But for some reason
I couldn't let you go
Though it was like my life's deadly season
Not acknowledging that our relationship was only so-so
You took you heartbreaking leave
Corrupted tears fleeing me
Escaping me like a cold breeze
I put you and our memories behind me
Never again to turn my head
Living life without you
These new tears have yet to shed
I could have done better than you
No longer traumatized by your act
I will find someone new
Keeping my fragile heart intact
Because I'm happier without you
- by l Princess Sugar l |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/19/2008 |
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- Title: Smile Again
- Artist: l Princess Sugar l
- Description: Ok, so I think I should add more but I dont have much time to write anymore so heres what I have so far, comment so I kno how to make it better though, please? lol
- Date: 10/19/2008
- Tags: smile again
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Comments (4 Comments)
- l Princess Sugar l - 10/19/2008
- omg thanx that was helpful! i just have to get time to rewrite it, i was sorta in the middle of class when I worte this and being in the front row doesnt help much lol
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- Ms Make Me Smile - 10/19/2008
- i thought it was very good,the thing i would say is that i think it would be better with alot more emotion and there wasnt really any rythm to it,which i think is a pretty big problem. i get what you were trying to do and the concept is very good and if you exclude what i said then it is very very good.so i think if it was rewritten it would be even better.3/5
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- sezuko - 10/19/2008
- its really good beyond words
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- Lex2442 - 10/19/2008
- i love it its great. lol i dont liek my poem i wrote though it was easy but not good.
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